fic for [livejournal.com profile] magnetic_pole

Dec. 31st, 2006 04:56 pm
[identity profile] glass-icarus.livejournal.com posting in [community profile] small_gifts
Title: train (terrain) tracks
Author: [livejournal.com profile] glass_icarus
Written for: [livejournal.com profile] magnetic_pole
Rating: G
Summary and/or Prompt: Request was for "public transportation (magical or Muggle)."
Any other random notes, warnings, etc.: Title pun borrowed from Purvi Shah's poetry book (Terrain Tracks), for which I beg a thousand pardons. Happy holidays, Maggie!


The rhythmic sound of the train washes over Sirius. He leans back in his seat, thinking of the Hogwarts Express. In the light of sunset, he can almost see Remus laughing beside him, resting his head on Sirius' shoulder.

Sirius reaches out and touches empty air.

(It took James to shout him out of his shocked stupor, when he discovered that Moony had left him; but it took Lily to negotiate their delicate truce. "You can't be stubborn, Sirius," she said, and he laughed. Stubborn? With Moony, he had precious little pride; he'd discovered long ago that he was no good without Remus. Remus was his best thing, the one person he'd fight tooth and nail to keep, to protect, to love. In Remus was his entire world.)

Night falls as he sits, staring out the window. The sky turns purple-blue, stars winking into sight. His car is almost empty, so there is no one to complain when he stretches his legs, propping his feet up on the seat across from him. The tracks curve away into the darkness of the countryside, steel shadows almost invisible to his light-accustomed eyes. The moon edges into one corner of the glass as the train turns; Sirius touches it with gentle fingers.

"Moony," he whispers, smiling, but of course there is no one there to respond.

(Lily forced him to stay in London until they worked things out: many letters exchanged, and some Floo calls. The Floo calls were few and far between, as the sight of Remus' worn, tired face made Sirius anxious and restlessly impatient. Sometimes, he would listen to reason; sometimes, James had to tackle him and sit on his head. Lily knew when to pick her battles.)

He fancies he can hear the soft hum of the reading light, flickering above his head. It reminds him painfully of Remus, so often found asleep with a book in his hand, the bedside table lamp still bright in his eyes. An attendant pushes a cart past Sirius' seat, tin carafes and plastic mugs rattling gently down the aisle. Sirius sighs and reaches up to turn off the light, leaving only a dim reflection of his face in the darkened window. Are we there yet? Are we there yet? sing the tracks, until Sirius can no longer tell if he is awake or asleep.

(Four months, three weeks, and six days after he'd found his flat bereft of all things Moony, Sirius found himself trudging to the Muggle post office with a box of Remus' favorite tea. Lily found him malingering outside a nearby Marks & Spencer, staring moodily at the pale-brown hair of the plastic model in the shop window, and had to laugh. Hooking her arm through his, she dragged him to a safe Apparition point and promptly side-alonged him to Godric's Hollow. "All right," she said, ruffling his hair fondly as he nursed his headache, "all right. I'll talk to him." Sirius only nodded, too dizzy to reply.)

Sirius watches the trees scroll by, their dark fingers grasping at the stars. Only ten minutes to the next stop; only ten minutes to Remus. There is a certain serenity that comes with being between places, a curious comfort to be found in transit. Absently, his fingers trace the ragged edge of Remus' last letter, tucked in his pocket: a promise, of sorts, a bargain- that neither of them will walk away from their problems, that they will not take refuge in silence and uncertainty.

(You can come for a week, Remus had written. I'll pick you up at the station. Then, almost as an afterthought, I miss you. Three lines only, to make Sirius smile like the sun.)

Sirius presses his forehead against the window. Don't give up on me, he thinks, as the station lights waver into view, glaring brighter and brighter as the train approaches. There is a figure on the platform, shabbier and more silver-tinged than he remembers. The moon hangs low upon the horizon, a hope, a reminder.

The train stops. Sirius walks through the open door, bag slung over one shoulder.

Remus smiles. "Padfoot. We have many things to talk about."

Date: 2007-01-02 04:11 pm (UTC)
From: [personal profile] snegurochka_lee
Oh wow, this was beautiful! I love the parenthetical explanations of what had happened, and up until the last moment I thought it wouldn't end happily. What a lovely story!

Date: 2007-01-02 04:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/sapphirestar_/
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how very, very lovely. i love the slight hints at the beginning, the impending doom and the so much loved maybe-happy ending. just, so lovely. before it was revealed that sirius was off to see remus, i was almost afraid of reading the ending -- i just had to have at least a somewhat happy ending to this, and that it was.

Sirius reaches out and touches empty air.

&

Are we there yet? Are we there yet? sing the tracks

were such brilliantly touching lines, the both of them. so beautiful, and the images this has painted -- sirius standing outside marks & spencer, sirius with remus' favourite tea, remus' letter which so very clearly was read so very often -- were also so incredibly beautiful. and the ending, oh. very lovely!

Date: 2007-01-02 06:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sleeper6.livejournal.com
So beautiful. I like that Sirius is so eager to get there, but in a calm manner. We don't see Sirius be so calm so often, but here it works wonderfully.

Date: 2007-01-02 07:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] magnetic-pole.livejournal.com
THANK YOU, sweetie! This is really wonderful--full of both anticipation and unhappiness. The structure really works, as Lee says above, and of course your language is beautiful as always. Much appreciation! Maggie

Date: 2007-01-02 11:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] secretsolitaire.livejournal.com
Mmm, lovely! As others have noted, the structure works wonderfully, with the parentheticals. I am intrigued by why exactly Remus left, though I can imagine (especially given the time period you've chosen).

Don't give up on me, he thinks, as the station lights waver into view, glaring brighter and brighter as the train approaches. There is a figure on the platform, shabbier and more silver-tinged than he remembers. The moon hangs low upon the horizon, a hope, a reminder.

I like this part a lot. :-)

Date: 2007-01-03 08:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lotrwariorgodss.livejournal.com
Relaxed, beautifully written, with twinges of angst and a hopeful ending - very lovely work!

Date: 2007-01-03 11:44 am (UTC)
busaikko: Remus and Sirius kissing (R/S MadHouse kiss)
From: [personal profile] busaikko
I love that you write trains as if you are a person who rides them: you catch the rhythm and the mood wonderfully. I love how everything moves so slowly until it's that last ten minutes and then the weight of anticipation and excitement hits. I really want to know what happens next....

Date: 2007-01-03 12:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] liseuse.livejournal.com
Oh. I think my heart has been broken and pieced back together.
I think the part that hit me was the posting of the tea. (So British!) Just heartbreaking.

Date: 2007-01-04 12:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] liseuse.livejournal.com
Oh, don't hide the empty cup. I'm a big fan of tea. I consider it the most British thing about me, other than an amazing ability to consider the weather a topic of conversation, and an appreciation for the batty train network.

Date: 2007-01-05 04:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] liseuse.livejournal.com
Tea transcends all boundaries. It's a magical substance.

Date: 2007-01-03 05:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sambethe.livejournal.com
This is just love. I particularly like the way you cut between what is happening and what has already come to pass. This just feels real and tangible.

Enjoyed!

Date: 2007-01-04 06:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jamesly.livejournal.com
Oh, I love this! It's so precise and concise and the description's got this sweet little snap to it. The bits in parantheses, too, are fantastic. I love little clips inside vignettes.

Date: 2007-03-14 12:13 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] such_heights
The moon edges into one corner of the glass as the train turns; Sirius touches it with gentle fingers.

"Moony," he whispers, smiling, but of course there is no one there to respond.


That is such a warm, fuzzy, adorable image and I love it, though in the context of the story it's really terribly sad.

=) The ending of this makes me so smiley! And three cheers for trains.

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