Thank you for your wonderful comments! (I’ll enjoy crafting my reply to the other one a bit later. I’m thrilled that These Acts of Love, too, has worked so well for you, and I’ll treasure what you’ve said about it.)
Oh, you’ve made me realise that Sirius is, indeed, the first one to become aware of benefiting from physical touch here. My Remus is usually more eager for physical demonstration of affection than my Sirius (whereas I think the opposite is more common in fanon). Remus’s state here, however, makes it too hard for him to hope for a touch – no matter how much he needs it – or to first fully understand its value. First of all, of course, I’m glad that Sirius’s “Don’t wake me” says so much to you.
And I’m thrilled you actually like the lack of sexualising. I remember being happy to offer to the readers a least something as erotic as the pair naked in a bathtub, and I’ve assumed that readers want to continue and sexualise, when I close my stories with the first subtle touches. Now that I look at this text more carefully again, I notice that Remus sticks to focusing on their getting clean and fed – and continuing to breathe – after the mere ambiguous mention of living fully. And this must be appropriate and realistic in his situation. In turn, Sirius – who doesn’t know about Remus’s loss yet – probably finds pleasure in tracing the scars, perhaps ready to make the most of their intimacy, even though it’s the result of bathing together as a necessity.
Thank you so much also for praising my descriptions. Here I tried my best to insert the vivid details gradually enough – at moments when Remus could plausibly pay attention to them.
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Date: 2010-01-16 11:54 pm (UTC)Oh, you’ve made me realise that Sirius is, indeed, the first one to become aware of benefiting from physical touch here. My Remus is usually more eager for physical demonstration of affection than my Sirius (whereas I think the opposite is more common in fanon). Remus’s state here, however, makes it too hard for him to hope for a touch – no matter how much he needs it – or to first fully understand its value. First of all, of course, I’m glad that Sirius’s “Don’t wake me” says so much to you.
And I’m thrilled you actually like the lack of sexualising. I remember being happy to offer to the readers a least something as erotic as the pair naked in a bathtub, and I’ve assumed that readers want to continue and sexualise, when I close my stories with the first subtle touches. Now that I look at this text more carefully again, I notice that Remus sticks to focusing on their getting clean and fed – and continuing to breathe – after the mere ambiguous mention of living fully. And this must be appropriate and realistic in his situation. In turn, Sirius – who doesn’t know about Remus’s loss yet – probably finds pleasure in tracing the scars, perhaps ready to make the most of their intimacy, even though it’s the result of bathing together as a necessity.
Thank you so much also for praising my descriptions. Here I tried my best to insert the vivid details gradually enough – at moments when Remus could plausibly pay attention to them.