Oh. Ohohoh. Now I see. You don't need to put sex in your writing, at least not with a piece like this. The ending contains an eroticism all its own without having to approach anything remotely more detailed.
You know what struck me most about this? The fact that you've managed to convey, without ever coming out and saying it, just how far Remus' neglect of himself has gone. He's breaking apart, mentally and physically.
Not knowing your Remus well enough yet, I'm curious as to why he would so question his welcome in Sirius' flat, if the nature of their relationship is so intimately established already. Is it his own self-doubt that fuels such an odd reticence to rely on the goodwill of others, or is it the nature of his depression over the death of his parents?
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Date: 2008-02-28 01:24 pm (UTC)You know what struck me most about this? The fact that you've managed to convey, without ever coming out and saying it, just how far Remus' neglect of himself has gone. He's breaking apart, mentally and physically.
Not knowing your Remus well enough yet, I'm curious as to why he would so question his welcome in Sirius' flat, if the nature of their relationship is so intimately established already. Is it his own self-doubt that fuels such an odd reticence to rely on the goodwill of others, or is it the nature of his depression over the death of his parents?