Thank you so much. I’m thrilled that the first public comment on this story starts with laughter and with very funny! While my fiction voice and my Remus’s voice could probably be described as quiet and gentle, I spontaneously chose the kicking detail, and perhaps in this single line I managed to add some contrast to any possibly heartbreaking tone. Perhaps the ”Sirius and James” thing also gave another dimension to Sirius’s character here and to the complex reality I want to hint at.
I’m happy you could see (sense) the intimacy, too. I don’t think I’ve ever written a (conventional) kissing scene, not to mention a sex scene. And for a couple of years now I’ve written all my short pieces in the first person and present tense, even though I know that a lot of readers have a general prejudice against this technique. Thank you for giving a chance to this entry, and for taking the time to praise it.
I hope you’ll enjoy this another time around, too. ishonn said she found new meanings in some details while re-reading.
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Date: 2007-12-11 06:11 pm (UTC)I’m happy you could see (sense) the intimacy, too. I don’t think I’ve ever written a (conventional) kissing scene, not to mention a sex scene. And for a couple of years now I’ve written all my short pieces in the first person and present tense, even though I know that a lot of readers have a general prejudice against this technique. Thank you for giving a chance to this entry, and for taking the time to praise it.
I hope you’ll enjoy this another time around, too.